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[達人專欄] 【短篇】天譴 Damnation

作者:Komi(貴霜雜食動物)│2020-09-04 22:37:33│巴幣:54│人氣:343

   It was a picture that never could be erased from my brain. On a summer afternoon, I, a forty-year-old policeman, was jogging along the street in my short vacation. When running through the square in front of a business building, I shocked. Several people were waving their T-shirts from the windows. They were screaming, shouting, even yelling. "What happened? " I asked a passerby. " There is a big fire. Look, the KTV on the second floor is burning; the firefighters came and tried to save those who are still staying inside. " He answered. Many of the residents stepped toward the wall of the building and were dying to see what's going on with it.

   A burning desire to help these miserable people, who were trapped in this concrete structure, filled my heart, but I had no idea. Dozens of fire engines had stopped on the ground. Unfortunately, the fire was in a place that was hard to approach. A cloud of black smoke floated out from the window. The building was getting hotter and hotter. Then, people's voice turned into silence, and the silence was like death. The only thing we could do was wait.

   After the fire was put out, my supervisor commanded me to investigate everything about this terrible fire. Almost all the equipment was burnt. Wandering into the building, I felt I was in a dark maze. It is said that 6 dead bodies were being found in the staircase. They had tried to escape and go down the stair, but it was in vain.

   The lucky survivor is a student, George. He followed me to go to the police station and talked to me. " I was the last person arriving at the KTV. At that time, my classmates sat on the sofa and sang the songs happily. There were 7 participants, including me. We were celebrating a girl, Anne's birthday. Everyone looks like enjoying the vibe, clapping hands when Anne was crooning a beautiful ballad with no lyrics. A boy gave her a microphone; the time seems to be paused. And then... I don't remember anything. " George illustrated to me with sadness.

   " Oh, poor boy. " I felt so sorry about him. I almost lost my words after he told me that. Then, I stood up to bring a glass of lemonade to him. When walking, I saw his eyes filled with melancholy. He didn't drink it immediately; instead, he turned on the smartphone and showed me a photo. " This is Anne, who is the girl I fell in love with. You can never imagine how pretty she is before seeing her in yourself. " George whispered with a smile. Abruptly, I noticed that his right eye was in a bandage.

   " Did you get hurt? " I cared about him. " Yes, " he said. " The doctor told me it will never recover. " Submerged by the gloomy mood, my mind flashed back to the fire scene again and again. The fire must be an accident, which took the lives of many innocent victims, but there was something strange. It was too difficult to explain my feeling.

   " To be honest, I really want to be with Anne forever, but my classmates always laughed at me. They called me an ugly and short guy. As I appeared in Anne's birthday party, they complained that I was an unwanted guest. Hence, I was kicked out by those boys. And... " He removed the bandage slowly. " I bought gasoline and splashed all of it on the floor outside, IGNITING THE FIRE! I could go to heaven with Anne...However, I still didn't die. "

   Looking at the horrifying, disgusting scar on his face, I trembled. " I'll arrest you! " I announced in anger. " You can't get away from this. " As soon as the fire alarm rang, he smirked at me. " The tragedy has not ended yet. Now, it's your turn. " In the blink of an eye, I saw those painful, hopeless faces of the deceased, creeping toward me.


這裡是翻譯:

那是一幅永遠無法從我的腦海中抹去的畫面。一個夏日的下午,我,一個四十歲的警察,在我短暫的假期裡於街上慢跑著。當穿過商業大樓前的廣場時,我嚇到了。好幾個人從窗戶揮舞著他們的T恤。他們尖叫,大喊甚至瘋狂吼著。 “發生了什麼事?”我問一個路人。 “有大火。看,二樓的KTV著火了;因此,消防員趕來並試圖營救仍在裡面的人。”他回答。許多居民朝建築物的牆壁走去,並渴望看到裡面的情況。
 
我的心中充滿了一股炙熱的渴望,想幫助這些被困在這座水泥結構體裡的悲慘的人,但我卻不曉得怎麼辦。數十輛消防車停在地面上。不幸的是,火災發生在難以接近的地方。一團黑煙從窗戶飄出。建築物越來越熱。然後,人們的聲音變成了沉默,沉默就像死亡。我們唯一能做的就是等待。
 
火被滅掉後,我的上司命令我調查有關這起可怕火災的所有事情。幾乎所有設備都被燒毀了。走進大樓,我感到自己身處黑暗的迷宮中。據說在樓梯上發現了6具屍體。他們曾試圖逃脫並走下樓梯,但徒勞無功。
 
幸運的倖存者是一位學生,喬治。他跟著我去派出所和我談談。 “我是最後一個到達KTV的人。那時,我的同學們坐在沙發上快樂地唱歌,包括我在內,共有7位參與者。我們正在慶祝一個女孩,安妮的生日。每個人看起來都喜歡這種氛圍。 當安妮正在吟唱一首沒有歌詞的美麗民謠時,我們拍著手。一個男孩給了她一支麥克風;時間似乎被暫停了。然後……我就什麼都不記得了。“喬治悲傷地對我說。
 
“哦,可憐的男孩。”我為他感到很難過。他告訴我之後,我幾乎失去了言語。然後,我站起來拿一杯檸檬水給他。走路時,我看到他的眼睛充滿憂鬱。他沒有立刻喝,反而打開了手機,給我看了一張照片。“這就是安妮,她是我愛上的那個女孩。在親眼見到她之前,你無法想像她有多漂亮。”喬治微笑著呢喃道。突然,我注意到他的右眼被繃帶纏住了。
 
“你受傷了嗎?”我關心他。 “是的,”他說。 “醫生告訴我,它將永遠無法康復。”憂鬱的情緒淹沒了我的思緒,一次又一次地閃回火場。這場火災應該是一場意外,而它奪走了許多無辜受害者的生命,但還是有些奇怪。很難解釋我的感覺。
 
“說實話,我真的很想永遠與安妮在一起,但是我的同學們總是嘲笑我。他們稱我為一個又醜又矮的傢伙。當我出現在安妮的生日聚會中時,他們抱怨我是不請自來的客人。因此,我被那些男孩趕了出去,然後……“他慢慢地把繃帶移開了。“我買了汽油,把所有的汽油灑在外面的地板上,點燃了火!我本可以和安妮一起去天堂的……但是,我仍然沒有死。”
 
看著他臉上可怕的,令人作嘔的疤痕,我發抖了。 “我會逮捕你的!”我憤怒地宣告著。 “你無法逃離這裡。”火災警報響起後,他對我冷笑著。“悲劇還沒有結束。現在輪到你了。”轉眼間,我看到死者的那些痛苦,絕望的面孔向我爬來。





第一次挑戰用英文創作故事!

這個其實算是暑假作業,我搬上來跟大家分享。內容大概就是一名憤世嫉俗的男子縱火燒了大樓,但故意把它寫得很懸疑。我覺得兇手的動機超瞎的......。

大家要不要試試看在下面用英文留言給我? 感覺會滿好玩的。




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路邊的野貓
寫英文小說好厲害OAO 不懂英文沒辦法用英文回QwQ

09-04 22:53

Komi(貴霜雜食動物)
沒事,沒關係。09-04 22:54
黑化跌死
Well story plot and atmosphere done right here , the main character’s act remind me much about those “Yandere” plots in anime story

“That’s my true feeling even if it is a sick of love if it is what you would say , It would not cost a arm and a leg to accept so , yet , it would definitely cost a life to deny that so”

09-05 01:16

Komi(貴霜雜食動物)
Yandere! This is what I want to portray. The characters who are well known as Yandere are usually associated with crazy, unconditional love. Maybe it sounds scary or insane, but it is still beautiful in some's eyes. 09-05 10:10
章魚茶
The time I saw this, I thought to myself 'I should read this out loud.'
I did and found that it's getting a little bit bizarre. As soon as the boy said he had wanted to be with Anne, I knew there's definitely something wrong and guessed it was a murder right away. Despite that, the story still surprised me with the creepy ending.
It's interesting to read, I enjoyed it so much. Keep up the good work!

09-05 01:25

Komi(貴霜雜食動物)
I felt it was like a traditional horror movie.
Thanks for your reading. When I received your compliment, I was very happy!
I thought the readers' emotion would be getting stronger and stronger during they read; actually, they did. The ending must give you goosebumps, as well as keeping you thinking.09-05 10:27
大漠倉鼠
"Wakanda forever!"A hamster shouting.

09-05 08:07

Komi(貴霜雜食動物)
" Show your loyalty and discipline! "09-05 09:55
吉風翅
Well, I think the culprit's motive is quite reasonable, there are always some cases in the real world with motives that go beyond our imagination
One part that I don't get is that did George really forget what happened when he described Anne's birthday celebration at first?
I would recommend taking out the "therefore"from the first paragraph as we don't usually use it in a dialogue

09-07 09:36

Komi(貴霜雜食動物)
No, he didn't forget it. He lied to the policeman. He just wanted to trick him.
The culprit was so desperate that he killed all the bullies; he didn't regret anymore.
Moreover, the story between George and Anne was so heartbroken...[e13]
Thanks for your advice!09-07 17:59
ready player
Love it that being a first-person narrative, the protagonist doesn't go all emotion in story.

Say that is one edgy edgy brat right there, what does the policeman even have to do with him?

09-13 00:02

Komi(貴霜雜食動物)
To be frank, I don't think of narrating the events that happen between him and the policeman in the future.09-13 09:51
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